For our major assignment three we are making our research paper of the history of literacy analysis. Our group still needs help on making it sound like one tone is writing it. We could use help on where to add additional information. As well, with finding a less basic layout. Other then that we feel as if we have everything else covered.
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I love how all of your childhoods were different but there are still the little things that we all can relate to, like the Rainbow Fish book, and reading and pointing with your finger. You should add more of the different things each person went through, so we can see what you guys did differently too.
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There is still a lot missing, but that’s okay because its just the rough draft. Where you said though out the project you collected a lot of data, maybe you could give us some of it, and give us some of the questions that you guys were answering so the reader can get a feel of what you guys had the same and what was different.
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I love how you added in a little bit of background on Manisha and her family. It was nice to see how in some ways she struggled, so readers may be able to relate to her.
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In the beginning you said your topic of research was you guys, and also readings you guys read. Maybe you could talk a little bit more about the readings, and explain what they were and how they helped you with you project.
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Great work on the projects guys, I really like the concept of this project. There were a few parts I got a little confused who was speaking. During the paper the conversation went from “we” to “I” at times without explaining who the writer was.
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Adding a few more examples of the questions you asked may help better explain the purpose of the paper which will also add to the length of the project. I felt like we may have only heard from one or two writers and Id love to read about each of your experiences a bit more!
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Specifically during the introduction, some words were used rather often, adding additional ways to display the message could help the reader push on more thoroughly
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Excellent examples and the point was clearly received, I am excited to see the final version of the paper.
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